A man corners an old friend in a party bathroom to explain he’s trapped in a time loop — the reveal is a forgotten turkey.
A Rick and Morty cold-open, crammed into a party bathroom.
The story
Kyle corners Todd in a party bathroom mid-piss, insisting he’s been trapped in a time loop of the same evening, rewriting reality with a device called the 4D Remote, hunting a rival time-traveler he suspects is sabotaging him. He builds the premise out in full, cascading-consequence sci-fi logic — atom-for-atom recreation, unraveling timelines, a whole pitch that lands as “a Chris Pratt vehicle.” Then the actual ask arrives: go tell Emily the oven isn’t plugged in before she notices the turkey never went in. Retcon Night is a tightly-wound two-hander that spends five pages building a science-fiction crisis to deliver a domestic punchline.
Coverage — plot points
- Kyle corners Todd in the bathroom mid-piss, breathless: “I fucked up.”
- He explains the 4D Remote, a time-loop retcon technology, in ever-more-baroque sci-fi terms.
- Todd, patient and confused, keeps mistaking the pitch for a sketch premise.
- The actual crisis: Emily forgot to start the turkey, and Kyle can’t face telling her.
“I fucked up.” — “Do I know you?” — “I hope so.”
“I need you to go out there and tell Emily she’s forgotten to start the turkey.”
Read the sample
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Seeking representation, or a home in a shorts / anthology package. Complete script available on request.